Please use the PowerPoint provided in the upload! These are few key points given after correction of PowerPoint to improve essay writing since we are using the PowerPoint : Your description seems narrowly based on the picture and a very general sense of what’s going on. You are not really describing the scene in the story with its nuance and specific detail. The biggest concern is the QUOTE. When you move these paragraphs to ESSAY 2, they need quotes! For Taymor, use our Arden Shakespeare and provide act, scene, line in parentheses. For Kiki, use a line from the scene in the movie.